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caxama Archer Since: 06-22-05 From: Petaluma, CA, you just gotta love that sunshine Since last post: 6659 days Last activity: 6272 days |
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Tight and Burning
The Hell Fires of Hades Has asended into my lungs Gasping Clawing The Darkness begins to win Hope All I need I don't want to die Why doesn't someone see me? Has the darkness swallowed me yet? Help Me...Please Mind is swimming Tierd, so very tierd I can't fight it anymore Dimly aware Numb to the surroungings An arm around my waist I can't feel the dock beneathe me I can't feel the life giving air that is forced into me I can't... Eyes open A blurry face before me Am I dead? Is this Gabriel, come to claim me A roiling, churning feeling from deep within me A torrent of death epelled. Air The most beautiful element. |
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AlpoRaggins Troubadour Not so much dead. Since: 12-11-04 From: Someday, Somewhere, Over the Rainbow Since last post: 6612 days Last activity: 6501 days |
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Wow, I didn't see this one before. That was pretty sweet. It made me actually a bit anxious to see what would happen to the person in the poem. That was a pretty strong ending - I like the ones that go out in a bang. Good job! | |||
Evo Red Super Koopa Watching you fall brings joy to my heart.... Since: 08-16-04 From: Oregon Since last post: 6108 days Last activity: 6048 days |
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Beautiful. I like the beginning, and I like the end the most. It pulls it all together. | |||
Cairoi This isn't about you and your loud mouth, This is about me and my fucking beard. Since: 08-29-04 From: PA Since last post: 4848 days Last activity: 4471 days |
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Wow, good. I honestly thought It was a baby being born. ^.^ THe end was well written indeed. | |||
caxama Archer Since: 06-22-05 From: Petaluma, CA, you just gotta love that sunshine Since last post: 6659 days Last activity: 6272 days |
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As you all probably figured out she was drowning and was saved, kind of life immitating (yes sometimes I can't spell) art. But truth be told, this actually happened. And yes, when you're about thisclose to dying, there is a light. Don't laugh at me, it's true, and it's a terrifing but beautiful (I'm strange I know) experience. | |||
AlpoRaggins Troubadour Not so much dead. Since: 12-11-04 From: Someday, Somewhere, Over the Rainbow Since last post: 6612 days Last activity: 6501 days |
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Oh, theres nothin' to laugh at about it - its a real thing, many people have witnessed this light but lived to tell about it. Read the book Life After Life if you're really interested to see what is before that and what is beyond. Its an interesting read, and I think it pertains to the happening that occured in the poem. |
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