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Zombie Marco








Since: 03-24-06

Since last post: 3832 days
Last activity: 3728 days
Posted on 03-08-07 05:01 PM Link | Quote
Not sure why I didn't post this before. It is a very old poem that I wrote. I do realize there are flow problems...

Walking through the mist and darkness
The path I follow is bare and markless
Searching, seeking, high and low
Looking for something of which I know

Looking for anything that is not the same
Wondering if I'm to blame
Because I lost my loving wife
I feel there is no point to life,
full of despair and strife
Striving to rediscover my loving wife

I met her once before
On the early ocean shore
It was April, may, or June
And we sat staring
at the moon


We loved each other like no other
Like the winter and the summer

To be parted
Now or then
Would it be the very end

For two lovers bound together
should not be parted
Now or ever

But my lover
Yes, her mother
Did not want me
To be the other

The more they tried to keep us apart
The more the love grew
in both our hearts
But we continued
to love each other
And we overcame
my lovers mother

Ah, I remember it
loud and clear
As if someone whispering
it in my ear
Tis a pity
such a waste
That my lovers
life was taken
in such haste

When this happened
I implore
I crumbled
to the floor
I could stand it no more
Nevermore
Makura









Since: 01-22-05
From: The restaurant at the end of the universe....

Since last post: 5889 days
Last activity: 5154 days
Posted on 03-12-07 09:17 AM Link | Quote
You have some pretty creative stuff in there. I'll admit it does have some cliche's, and some flow issues, but I like a few of the ideas.

EDIT: I added a little bit to A Big Wall of Water.


(Last edited by Makura on 03-12-07 12:17 PM)
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