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cityondown012510

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Since: 05-30-10
From: Bensalem

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Posted on 10-21-10 12:43 AM Link | Quote
This is a short ghost story that I wrote and plan to distribute to the people in my dorm (McCarthy Hall) to try and get everyone in the mood for Halloween. Feedback would be appreciated.



As you walk through the corridors of McCarthy Hall, what do you see? College students, RAs, sometimes parents. Maybe an inspirational quote on the whiteboard of some room, a silly inside joke on another. Some doors are decorated creatively. Some arenít decorated at all. Some are always open, encouraging visitors. If one were so inclined to walk through McCarthy Hall, one would see all of this, and probably much more. However, itís what you wouldnít see that should concern you most.

You see, there is much more to McCarthy Hall than you, or anyone else, could imagine. There are things that have happened in this building that are too awful for documentation, and students arenít the only thing living here. Of course, you can take the skeptical approach, and say that thereís no such things as ghosts, spirits, phantoms, whatever you want to call them. This would be foolish. Because one night, you might find yourself walking to the bathroom. It may be very late, and everyone else in your hall may be asleep. And thatís when youíll see a figure just ahead. You wonít be able to make out exactly what it is, itíll be just out of your vision. Maybe turning a corner, maybe just too far away to discern its identity. Maybe you forgot to put your glasses on or your contacts in, and you just assume itís another student having a late night, like yourself.

Maybe, once youíre in the bathroom, you forget about it. On your way back out, maybe you see it again, but clearer this time. A woman, dressed in Victorian clothing, looking gloomily out a window, or making her way somberly down the hall. You might be freaked out, but most likely, youíll shake it off and tell yourself that itís your mind or eyes playing tricks on you, or that youíre just sleep deprived. So, you ignore it, think positive, happy thoughts, and go back to your room.

And then, youíll hear a noise behind you. Youíll turn around, alarmed, but there wonít be anything there. When you turn your attention back to the door, youíll catch something out of the corner of your eye. You might be shaking a bit at this point, fear getting the best of you. Eventually, of course, youíll get the door open. Once you open it, what would you do if you saw a face in front of your own? Would you run? Or would you continue into the room? The face, the warm, kind face of a young woman, will be smiling at you. You won't fear her, she seems too genuine and nice. Or, if you're a skeptic, you'll continue to assume it's just an illusion, or trickery. But part of you knows that sheís not. Part of you knows that she was real. But once you're in bed, nice and warm under your covers, you'll be fine. You'll forget all about what you saw and be overcome with thoughts of whatever comforts you in those moments between consciousness and sleep. That part of you hates this moment, because you know that's when she'll come. But logic and reason will win out, and you'll try to sleep.

As you drift off, and you hear that noise outside, you rationalize it and tell yourself that itís just some drunk students outside having a late night. Youíll think that the mysterious voice that you hear and the ghostly, echoing screams are just your neighborís TV. Youíll think that the footsteps that you hear are just the beginning of what could be a great and adventurous dream. Youíll think that the cold chill and sense of foreboding that washes over you is just a result of your roommate leaving the window open.

Maybe you should think again.
Elara

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Since: 08-15-04
From: Ferelden

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Posted on 10-21-10 10:18 AM Link | Quote
I like... but before I make any other comments I would like to ask if you are making this your entry or not?
cityondown012510

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Since: 05-30-10
From: Bensalem

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Posted on 10-21-10 12:58 PM Link | Quote
Nah, I just made this to mess with the people in my dorm. I'm gonna leave it around the hall and on bulletin boards and stuff xD
Elara

Divine Mamkute
Dark Elf Goddess
Chaos Imp
Penguins Fan

Ms. Invisable








Since: 08-15-04
From: Ferelden

Since last post: 18 days
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Posted on 10-21-10 05:58 PM Link | Quote
I gotta say I really like the end. The whole story has a really nice build up and then it just abruptly ends. To be honest, I kinda wish that it had more but I think that for a ghost story it works well...especially if it is to fuck with people.
cityondown012510

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Since: 05-30-10
From: Bensalem

Since last post: 2502 days
Last activity: 2514 days
Posted on 10-21-10 08:37 PM Link | Quote
Thanks!

I'm not sure what I wanna do yet for the Halloween one. I need to get on it, I don't wanna write it the night before again...
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